Dreamy eyes
Cherry lips
Flashing smile
Slender waist
Tender hands
Butter skin
Long legs
Dazzling skirt
Jingling anklets
Heavenly grace
Pretty woman
(Only left with..)
Lifeless living
Hurting shame
Unspoken word
Pricking pain
Cloudy eyes
Pearly drops
Deadly void
Cruel fate
Freezing gaze
Healing touch
Dream man
Beyond reach
Caressed dreams
Unfulfilled desires
Everyone's woman
Yet noone's..
18 comments:
ummm, sorry akku.....
i can't understand the poem! just dropped a comment to say i read it! ahem!!!!
Hi desi@heart,
thanks for dropping by. I am glad the post could capture your dream woman for the most part..
My dear sister, First, I don't know whether i can call it a poem..I was just experimenting descriptions in two words, an adjective and a noun for most part...I wanted to construct the image of a particular woman..Let's see if someone gets it..
First paart nanna irukku ;), baaki onnum puriyala
no...i think it's someone i donno much about! :)
i suppose u r talkin abt the infamous and the lesser privileged women...
And why ?
Good Anupama.!!
I wonder who has posted and deleted so many comments!!
Anyways, Renuka got it right!!! It's about a prostitute..
Narayanan, why..because I just felt like writing about them....it is a very sad life that they lead..
Vijay and Vani, now you know..don't you?
Loved the verse.
But then it wasn't a prostitute who came to my mind. I don't know but somehow felt the verse would suit just about any woman - someone 'liked' by all but 'loved' by none; someone who had to give up her man to live with his shadow.
I guess that's where the fun is...when u interpret it anyway you want.
Once again, lovely stuff Anu :)
Oviya peN azugiRAL viRkap paduvathai eNNi...your poem reminded me of these lines!! And nice experimentation (the two word style)!!
Desi@heart,
glad that it makes sense now! :)
Kumari, Hey ..so good to see you again..and you said that really right..the beauty of it lies in the freedom to interpret it the way you choose!:)
Agnibarathi, Thanks! :)
lovely one
once again!
Minimal words
highly touchy!!
Just loved the very description "Butter Skin" and "Cloudy eyes..." part is too good :-)
hey DD!! Thank you! :) and even you seem to have adopted the two word style!! :))
Enjoyed reading this. Yup, a lady left wanting from life does come to mind. Could have been a servant maid too... This is a really neat style of writing that you have come upon. Did you see this somewhere else, or is it originally yours? Very creative... keep it going, lady! :-)
hey there!
was aimlessly going thru blogs.found urs.read this post and just one word-WOW :-)
hi, new to ur blog...wonderful lyrics!
Eroteme, you ask questions that make me wonder, don't you? Well, I just thought about it..and you know what came to my mind..??
"Chubby cheeks,
dimple chin
rosy lips
teeth within.." :))
Nyscha and rt, thanks for stopping by and taking the time to drop a comment! :)
Wow , this is the most powerful poem I ve read with so few words in them . I just loved it ... maybe its the engineer's idea of optimising the creation to mean nothing more than its purpose ...?
Once again , just amazing .
Hi karthik, thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment..I happened to see this comment when I scrolled down my blog..Thank you, you helped me begin my day with a smile! :)
"maybe its the engineer's idea of optimising the creation to mean nothing more than its purpose ..." - Honestly, I didn't think this far! ;)
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